Heyy!! I said I'd check it out, and here i am!! So, (I'm sorry if this comes off as rude) I'd like to recommend a few things! You could add some commas and periods into the intro/opening, and you could organize the intro a bit more! It was a bit hard to like imagine what the oc looks like, but that might just be because I have a bad imagination! Otherwise, it's a great talkie in all!!<3
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𝓯𝓻𝓮𝓪𝓴𝔂Solider :3
09/04/2025
Agh! Sorry! I just realized how much I wrote!
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lillystorm 2
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09/04/2025
sorry I'm kinda bad at intros but I'm trying I'm also kinda bad at openings to do you think you could help me a little bit
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19𝓯𝓻𝓮𝓪𝓴𝔂Solider :3
09/04/2025
𝓯𝓻𝓮𝓪𝓴𝔂Solider :3
09/04/2025
lillystorm 2
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09/04/2025