its good but in the intro it uses the word wife instead of husband also just a little tip next time while writing use second person perspective writing tequnique it'll make it a lot better
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💜🦋🌷E. J.🌷🦋💜
المنشئ
9 hours ago
Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts! 💜 Just a little clarification: the introduction is already written in second-person perspective, as the narration consistently addresses the reader as "you." First-person dialogue doesn't change the narrative POV. As for "wife," that's part of the character's established role in this particular story. Different writing styles and creative choices are intentional, but I appreciate you taking the time to comment! 🌙
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Olivia+J. Kim
20/02/2026
I'm crying, this is so good!
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💜🦋🌷E. J.🌷🦋💜
المنشئ
21/02/2026
My hands shook while writing this. I'm glad you liked it🫶
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7lana427
13 hours ago
💜🦋🌷E. J.🌷🦋💜
المنشئ
9 hours ago
Olivia+J. Kim
20/02/2026
💜🦋🌷E. J.🌷🦋💜
المنشئ
21/02/2026