YeDeadWhoYetLive, you've done good with this one. I can tell that you put real effort into Daidaiiro. for starters, the name is quite creative. for a first talkie, it's quite well made. it has good grammer, a rare thing among many, and a well developed description. if I had to give any critiques, it would be to change the "So are you" to "You are also a first year" or something similar for clarity. I've spoken to Daidaiiro for a while now to get a good idea of the character, and it's actually good. it didn't just naturally gravitate to romance or anything, and was, all in all, enjoyable.
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4Thë Gum Man
15/07/2024