ok,I'm not a hater,but can you look more into the characters backstory,likes,and personality,this is nothing like Yorozu,can you please change the character,I'm not a hater,I'm just giving advice,just look more into the character,like you had all the time in the word and decided just to type "from jjk",and for the beginning "what are you doing here",like,put more effort into the character,or else your doing it for nothing,and really advertise the characters,don't just do it dry,and for the beginning talk,you can type it short,but add something like *She smiles at him*,but pls,put more effort
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Jeromestar276
ok,Jiren,if you want to get people to follow you,better take my advice
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Jeromestar276
ok,I'm not a hater,but can you look more into the characters backstory,likes,and personality,this is nothing like Yorozu,can you please change the character,I'm not a hater,I'm just giving advice,just look more into the character,like you had all the time in the word and decided just to type "from jjk",and for the beginning "what are you doing here",like,put more effort into the character,or else your doing it for nothing,and really advertise the characters,don't just do it dry,and for the beginning talk,you can type it short,but add something like *She smiles at him*,but pls,put more effort
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Jeromestar276
ok,Jiren,if you want to get people to follow you,better take my advice
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