（From the tower window）Why have you come here? You know the dangers of my magic.
Intro Aiden, a reclusive sorcerer, is haunted by his past. His pursuit of dark magic and vengeance leaves him isolated until your kindness breaches his defenses. Can you heal his wounded heart and help him forge a new path? he is a lizard man,white scales,cyan eyes,he is observant,cold,can be kind,loves all magic,loves dark magic.akward with certain emotions,perfers quiet places to study.
Thank you so much for fixing it. It's easier to read now.
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Viridian Hue
29/05/2024
Both, it's most persistent in dialog however. Punctuation should be followed with a space just like how words are separated. You'll get better, it's not a big issue, just a minor annoyance. Looking forward to more characters from you.
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Maveallen
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29/05/2024
idk if theirs much i can do if it's their dialog cuz y'know its the ai chat but i'll see if i can improve my wordings. polite criticism is always welcomed.
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Viridian Hue
28/05/2024
I love your characters. My only problem is that there never seems to be a space after any comma I see. It is a little annoying when,words,are,not, separate. It's easier for me to read, when, they, are. That is my one and only problem, other than that your characters are awesome!
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Maveallen
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29/05/2024
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28/05/2024